Ali baba was able to go inside the cave in many ways.

One way is, Ali baba said the same words that the captain said to open the secret door. These are some ways how Ali baba got inside the cave.


The youngest mermaid is different from all the other five mermaids in many ways. One way the mermaid is different from the other five mermaids is, the youngest mermaid would have a simple garden but the other 5 mermaids would make big changes/ideas. These are some ways to explain how the youngest mermaid is different from the other 5 mermaids.

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The youngest mermaid is different from all the other five mermaids in many ways.
- This is a great opening sentence! I would only eliminate the word "the" and switch around "five" and "other".
- Edited for grammar; The youngest mermaid is different from all five other mermaids in many ways.

One way the mermaid is different from the other five mermaids is, the youngest mermaid would have a simple garden but the other 5 mermaids would make big changes/ideas.
- Instead of using a forward slash, I am tweaking the wording so it is not needed. In order to not be too repetitive, I am changing the beginning to "for example". Finally, there is a comma needed after "garden".
- Edited for grammar; For example, the youngest mermaid would rather have a simple garden, while the other mermaids have ideas on how to change it.

These are some ways to explain how the youngest mermaid is different from the other 5 mermaids.
- Usually if we use a small number in writing, it would be written out! Other than that, this is a great conclusion. Since you only listed one example, I am changing the beginning to reflect that.
- Edited for grammar; This is one way to explain how the youngest mermaid is different from the other five mermaids.

Overall, nice work! Don't forget to add one more sentence in the middle, maybe including one more example.

Fully Edited Version:

The youngest mermaid is different from all five other mermaids in many ways. For example, the youngest mermaid would rather have a simple garden, while the other mermaids have ideas on how to change it. This is one way to explain how the youngest mermaid is different from the other five mermaids.

Edited by Grace Drake 

We can improve the earth in many ways.
One way we can improve the earth is by only turning on the lights when we need them. By doing this  we can save electricity. 
Another way we can improve our planet is by looking for the book you need in the library before buying and then throwing it away after you are done using it.

These are some ways how we can save our planet.

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We can improve the earth in many ways.
- Since Earth is the name of a planet, we should capitalize it.
- Edited for capitalization; We can improve the Earth in many ways.

One way we can improve the earth is by only turning on the lights when we need them.
- Great sentence! I will capitalize Earth in the final.

By doing this we can save electricity.
- You need a comma after "this". Otherwise, nice job!
- Edited for punctuation; By doing this, we can save electricity. 

Another way we can improve our planet is by looking for the book you need in the library before buying and then throwing it away after you are done using it.


- I am switching around the wording, because right now it sounds like throwing the book away is a way to improve the planet. Other than that, this fact is a great choice!
- Edited for word choice; Instead of buying and then throwing away a book, you can also improve the planet by checking out books from the library to reduce waste.

These are some ways how we can save our planet.
- I am sticking a transition phrase in the front of this sentence to signal the conclusion.
- Edited for word choice; In conclusion, these are a few ways that will help save our planet.

Good job picking out facts that work well with your argument! Be sure to watch the format so the sentences appear in paragraph form.

Fully Edited Version:

We can improve the Earth in many ways. One way we can improve the Earth is by only turning on the lights when we need them. By doing this, we can save electricity. Instead of buying and then throwing away a book, you can also improve the planet by checking out books from the library to reduce waste. In conclusion, these are a few ways that will help save our planet.

Edited by Grace Drake

The 50th anniversary of Earth Day.

Earth Day, which is celebrated annually on April 22, will be celebrated in different ways then the usual this year.

Some educators are hosting virtual events to teach recycling practices that students and their families can easily adopt, while others are organizing tutorials to help tutorials create posters and art advocating for action against climate change.

Some of these educators will be teaching about recycling practices that we can easily adopt and others will be running tutorials to help us create posters and signs for action against climate change.

William Winslow made his accomplishment. His accomplishment was to feed kids who were hungry/starving. William's goal was to do whatever it takes to end childhood hunger. 

One of his accomplishment's was helping the kids from almost dying of hunger. When William was in eighth grade he collected more than 55,000 pounds of food and raised $63,000.  This is an accomplishment that William Winslow made.

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William Winslow made his accomplishment.
- Edited for word choice; William Winslow achieved his goals.

His accomplishment was to feed kids who were hungry/starving.
- In this type of writing, we should try not to use "/", and instead use a word in its place.
- Edited for punctuation and word choice; His major accomplishment was feeding kids who were hungry and starving.

William's goal was to do whatever it takes to end childhood hunger.
- My only note is to use "took" instead of "takes" so the whole sentence is in past tense.
- Edited for word choice; William's goal was to do whatever it took to end childhood hunger.

One of his accomplishment's was helping the kids from almost dying of hunger.
- We can adjust this sentence a bit so it does not sound too similar to the two sentences before it. A good way to do this is to introduce the fact that you state in the next sentence.
- Edited for word choice and grammar; In order to help these kids who were dying of hunger, he began collecting food and raising money.

When William was in eighth grade he collected more than 55,000 pounds of food and raised $63,000.
- The only thing you need is a comma after "eighth grade". Nice job!
- When William was in eighth grade, he collected more than 55,000 pounds of food and raised $63,000.

This is an accomplishment that William Winslow made.
- I think that this sentence can be more powerful if we included his specific goal that he accomplished.
- Edited for word choice; In conclusion, this is how William Winslow achieved his goal of feeding hungry children.

Nice work! One thing to work on for next time is to use specific language in your introduction and conclusion, and to make sure that the conclusion covers the main point in the paragraph. It does not need to be a long sentence, but should include the specific problem that was solved or the question that was answered.

Fully Edited Version:

William Winslow achieved his goals. His major accomplishment was feeding kids who were hungry and starving. William's goal was to do whatever it took to end childhood hunger. In order to help these kids who were dying of hunger, he began collecting food and raising money. When William was in eighth grade, he collected more than 55,000 pounds of food and raised $63,000. In conclusion, this is how William Winslow achieved his goal of feeding hungry children.

Edited by Grace Drake


The Graduation ceremony held in Japan is different from the regular graduations held here. One way it is different is because, in Japan they used robots to distribute graduation certificates. It was a virtual ceremony. All the students watched the ceremony from their home. This ceremony was organized to prevent the spread of COVID -19. This is how the graduation ceremony is different in Japan because of COVID -19.

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The Graduation ceremony held in Japan is different from the regular graduations held here.
- This sentence is a good opening! I am specifying "This year" at the beginning of the sentence so the reader knows that this is not something that usually happens. I am also changing "is" to "was", because it already happened so we use past tense.
- Edited for word choice; This year, a graduation ceremony held in Japan was different from typical graduations.

One way it is different is because, in Japan they used robots to distribute graduation certificates.
- Great job! I am only changing "is" to "was" in the first half, and omitting the word "because". Here, it is not needed.
- Edited for grammar; One way it was different is, in Japan they used robots to distribute graduation certificates.

It was a virtual ceremony. All the students watched the ceremony from their home.
- These sentences go together, so we can combine them.
- Edited for grammar; It was a virtual ceremony, so all the students watched it from their homes.

This ceremony was organized to prevent the spread of COVID-19.
- Great job!

This is how the graduation ceremony is different in Japan because of COVID-19.
- We just need to put this sentence in past tense, so it matches the rest of them.
- Edited for word choice and grammar. This is how this graduation ceremony in Japan was different due to COVID-19.

Fully Edited Version:

This year, a graduation ceremony held in Japan was different from typical graduations. One way it was different is, in Japan they used robots to distribute graduation certificates. It was a virtual ceremony, so all the students watched it from their homes. This ceremony was organized to prevent the spread of COVID-19. This is how this graduation ceremony in Japan was different due to COVID-19.

Edited by Grace Drake 


The mayor and the governor have different opinion about reopening of New York public schools.  Mayor Bill de Blasio announced on Saturday the schools will be closed for the whole academic year 2020 to prevent spreading of the COVID-19. Hours later, Gov. Andrew Cuomo said the mayor had been premature in deciding school closure. It has to be coordinated across the metro areas and possibly even with other states such as New Jersey and Connecticut. This is how the governor and mayor have different opinions about reopening of public schools.

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The mayor and the governor have different opinion about reopening of New York public schools.
- Great opening sentence! I am just editing for grammar.
- Edited for grammar; The mayor and the governor have different opinions about the reopening of New York public schools.

Mayor Bill de Blasio announced on Saturday the schools will be closed for the whole "academic" year 2020 to prevent the spreading of COVID-19.
- Academic year does not need to be in quotes because it is a widely recognized term.
- Edited for grammar and punctuation; On Saturday, Mayor Bill de Blasio announced that the schools will be closed for the 2020 academic year to prevent the spread of COVID-19.

Hours later, Gov. Andrew Cuomo said the mayor had been premature in deciding school closure.
- Your sentence order is great and makes chronological sense! I am changing "said" to "stated" because it sounds more professional.
- Edited for word choice; Hours later, Gov. Andrew Cuomo stated that the mayor had been premature in deciding to close the schools.

It has to be coordinated across the metro areas and possibly even with other states such as New Jersey and Connecticut.
- I would specify that this sentence is the reason why Gov. Cuomo thinks that Mayor de Blasio is premature.
- Edited for word choice; He thinks it is premature because school closures have to be coordinated across the metro areas, and possibly even with other states such as New Jersey and Connecticut.

This is how the governor and mayor have different opinions about reopening of public schools.
- Nice job!

Overall, this paragraph was great. Your sentence length and order was very nice, and it really only needed minor tweaks.

Fully Edited Version:

The mayor and governor have different opinions about the reopening of New York public schools. On Saturday, Mayor Bill de Blasio announced that the schools will be closed for the 2020 academic year to prevent the spread of COVID-19. Hours later, Gov. Andrew Cuomo stated that the mayor had been premature in deciding to close the schools. He thinks it is premature because school closures have to be coordinated across the metro areas, and possibly even with other states such as New Jersey and Connecticut. This is how the governor and mayor have different opinions on the reopening of public schools.

Edited by Grace Drake 

 There are many reasons why birds migrating south.   One reason is because , in summer or spring there is food for birds to eat.      Another reason birds migrate is because in spring males attract females the there feathers and other features that they only grow in spring. These are some reasons why birds migrate south.

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There are many reasons why birds migrating south.
- I like that you introduce the paragraph by stating that there are multiple reasons and then listing them. I would specify that they migrate during the winter.
- Edited for grammar; There are many reasons why birds are migrating south for the winter.

One reason is because, in summer or spring there is food for birds to eat.
- Typically you do not need a comma after the word "because".
- Edited for word choice and grammar; One reason is that there is food available for birds to eat during the warmer months.

Another reason birds migrate is because in spring males attract females with there feather and other features that they only grow in spring.
- This is an interesting fact that was a great addition to this paragraph. Just remember that you would use "their" instead of "there" when you are talking about something that someone has.
- Edited for word choice and grammar; Birds may also migrate because males attract females with their feathers, as well as other features, in the spring.

These are some reasons why birds migrate south.
- Your ending sentence ties together the paragraph nicely!

Fully Edited Version:

There are many reasons why birds are migrating south for the winter. One reason is that there is food available for birds to eat during the warmer months. Birds may also migrate because males attract females with their feathers, as well as other features, in the spring. These are some reasons why birds migrate south.

Edited by Grace Drake



There are many reasons why it is good to practice social distance. One reason is because, even if you are six feet away from some one of your or their cough and sneeze can still reach his/her. Another reason why it good to practice social distance is because, Hota says all the measures are trying to achieve the same thing. For a kid this includes learning at home canceling play dates and sport events. These are some reasons why it is good to practice social distance.

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There are many reasons why it is good to practice social distance.
- Great length for an opening sentence, and it introduced the paragraph nicely. You can trim it down a bit more to omit unnecessary words!
- Edited for word choice; There are many good reasons to practice social distance.

One reason is because, even if you are six feet away from some one of your or their cough and sneeze can still reach his/her.
- I am changing the wording so it means the same thing, but I am using less words. For example, I am changing "his/her" to "them" to be more concise.
- Edited for word choice; For example, even if you are six feet away from someone, a cough or sneeze can still reach them.

Another reason why it good to practice social distance is because, Hota says that all the measures are trying to achieve the same thing. For a kid this includes learning at home and canceling play dates and sport events.
- Nice job on including evidence from the text! I am combining both sentences so you stick to the four sentence structure and eliminating some bits and pieces to make it more concise. Since the paragraphs are so short, it is a good idea to trim the sentences so every word is important to the point that you are making.
- Edited for word choice and combining sentences; All measures of social distance are working towards preventing disease, and for kids this means learning at home and cancelling play dates and sport events.

These are some reasons why it is good to practice social distance.
- Great job summing it up! I am only changing wording a bit so it doesn't sound too close to your first sentence, and to tell the reader why social distance is good.
- Edited for word choice; These are some reasons why practicing social distance is important to slow the spread of disease.

You have some great ideas and did a nice job picking out important information from the text. One thing to work on for next time is shortening sentences so they say exactly what you mean without "filler" words. You did a great job showing the reader that social distance is important, but the next step is explaining what it does and why it is important to us.

Fully Edited Version:

There are many good reasons to practice social distance. For example, even if you are six feet away from someone, a cough or sneeze can still reach them. All measures of social distance are working towards preventing disease, and for kids this means learning at home and cancelling play dates and sport events. These are some reasons why practicing social distance is important to slow the spread of disease.

Edited by Grace Drake


Jk Rowling thinks her new webpage will help children in many reasons. One reason she thinks this is because in her webpage it keeps children educated and entertained during the book COVID-19 pandemic. Another reason Jk Rowling thinks her webpage will help children is because one her book has been added to them Audible library of free books which makes the book immediately available in several different languages. This is why Jk thinks her new webpage will help children in many ways.



There are many things to do while you cant go out side because of COVID-19. One thing u can do is play with lego kits. You dont need to go outside and buy it either. Instead you can ship it to you for about 14.99 to 34.99. Another activity you can do is reading a book. Reading a book is beneficial for older kids and younger ones. It helps children grapple with difficult issues,reduces stress,improves vocabulary and they might otherwise ignore. These are some activities you can do while staying home from the COVID-19. 


  There are many ways to prevent from spreading the COVID-19. One of the important ways is by washing your hands frequently. Another way is by avoiding people who have a cold and cough. In addition to that people should cough and sneeze on a tissue or your elbow. In short you should wash your hands sneeze in your elbow and avoid people who are sick.